The moon tonight is, simply, a white note
adrift, spinning. It patiently tracks the breeze
on the edge of genesis, floating in motes
of static. On the surface, it seems at ease.
Light filters through oak leaves and coats
its thrall, the summer heat's slow weave
through the river's margins to the throat
of the sea. Small fish leap up to tease
the moon tonight. Simply, this white note
rotates its body like thread released
from reel, alters its position over nodes
of static on the surface. It seems at ease.
In this version of heaven, the harbor's boats
compose as they do, hulls tucked under lees
near the bluffs' edges, geneses afloat in motes
of stone. Waves disperse like seedlings
against the mainstays. Masts stand devoted
in their thralldom. Heat slowly weaves
the sheaves together, allows them to exude
their grasp of rhythm before Earth's marquise,
The Moon. Tonight is simply a white note,
sparsely pearled and reticent. It receives
the key's shift naturally. Sinks into mute
veils of static on the surface. At ease,
each celestial drifts along its sloped road,
guided by the low sky's gamut of color, chaste
ribbons atop ocean's edge. This genesis, moat
of stars en route to another night, bequeaths
nothing. Its body's erosion hastens, is cloaked
and resigned to thralldom. Sun's heat weaves
the moon and tonight into a single white note
afloat on the edge of dawn's genesis, faded moit
of static. On the surface, it hardly seems at ease
with thralldom, lost forever in heat's slow weave.
I've noticed, well, you must like the 'sound' of words more so than just to read through like most do. You create almost a symphony, each line melodic and meaningful. This was like reading music. It had me going line to line then I realized "hey, this has a pace to keep to". I decided not to push play on the audio file you provided, but I believe I heard it all the same.
Magnificent. -#SayItHere
I have already written two, except my version allows for the reader to read the poem as two separate villanelles or as one nested villanelle.
The non-indented stanzas serve as one villanelle.
The indented stanzas serve as the other.
The poem is written just as yours is written, so that it can be read as one "nested villanelle."
Thank you for creating such a unique form of poetry!